T2 persuasive writing

We have been learning to write persuasive texts. To do this, We had to use our words to convince someone to believe something. Here is an example of my writing. I tried to persuade adults with babies to stop dumping nappies. 

 STOP DUMPING RUBBISH!! To People with young children and babies, Please stop dumping nappies because… 1 It hurts the environment, for example we went to the Waitangi wetlands a few weeks ago and found over thirty bags of rubbish, the wetlands were filled with rubbish, the rubbish could destroy the trees and we wouldn't be able to breathe. 2 The fish could choke on the nappies and die if you throw the nappies in the river or the poo could poison them and we would have no fish left in the rivers. 3 People could step on the nappies and have really dirty shoes and have to throw them in the rubbish and they would be very angry and disappointed. And that's why I believe that you should stop dumping rubbish.